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The article is about sustainability. The professor gives an example of organization that makes big things in field of sustainability. He gives an example of printing company that is that has limited resources and also like paper, also things that damage environment like glue and ink. They always try to recycle paper and when the costumer doesn’t want recycled paper, they buy it from the companies that plant trees when they destroy one to get paper. Also the glue that glue papers for the books they are bad for recycling machine, also for environment because they have harmful chemical to air pollution and they damage machine, so the companies can’t recycle papers like books.
Structure
The structure here is very good. The only problem is that it repeats. It should read:
The professor gives an example of a printing company that makes big things in field of sustainability. It has limited resources. . .
Content
The content is fantastic in the first 75%. The underlined portion presents mistakes in the speech. The underlined portion doesn’t come from the glue, but from the ink. This speech misses the point about how the printing company uses vegetable oil based inks to reduce the amount of harmful chemicals and air pollution released into the environment. The last portion, “so the companies. . . “ doesn’t come from the lecture and should be deleted.
Overall, a good job.
Clarity
Every word you spoke was clear and easy to understand.
Grade
I would rate this fair: 3.5 (22/30).
Main Tip
Follow your notes carefully. How? Space your notes out; don't speak from memory, so look at your notes while speaking; write important key words that help you tell the story, not just every word you hear; don't worry about paraphrasing; use all of the words from the lecture that you can; don't change the order, which means say it the same way as the professor.
When we don’t have organized notes, they don't help.
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